Second Song Draft
I wrote this while listening to my Dispatch playlist, so I need to try and mess with the rhythm and meter to make this work.
Dive//From The Heavens
Well I looked to the sky
Trying to find
Something to guide me
And when it got down to it
I saw right through it
And found it inside me.
Because looking for answers
From celestial dancers
Just fails to inspire
Because if I'm not livin'
For the gifts that I'm given
I might as well expire.
[Chorus (1)]
The sun'll be up soon
Can't you see it from the summit?
Now take my hand, walk with me,
And we'll plummet.
(You've got to fight your fear)
I can't wait for you no more
So you take this leap with me
(Or you just disappear... while I soar).
They're light years away
But I live for the day
And the night in which I exist
And if I should fall
Out of touch with it all
Then I'd be inclined to resist.
But until the day reckons
My destiny beckons
For me to push forth, head held high
So I'll lie in the shades
With my forces in spades
Until my time comes nigh.
[Chorus (2)]
The sun'll be up soon
Can't you see it from the summit?
Now take my hand, walk with me,
And we'll plummet.
(You've got to fight your fear)
You take my hand, steady,
And I see you're ready
(So let's make our way from here).
The world's not enough
So I'm calling your bluff
Play for keeps and the stakes start to rise
And at the end of the day
I'd see it no other way
Than through these, my own righteous eyes.
So fold if you must
But I know I can trust
My instinct as it's never been wrong
If my perceptions are scrambled
Then I shouldn't have gambled
And I won't have that claim for so long.
I haven't written the music or chorus for this yet. I'm thinking of putting it into a key but I still haven't learned my fifths yet, so I'm at a standstill there.
Brainstorm:
D7 > A > C > B
Am > C > F (1123) > G (3345)
Dive//From The Heavens
Well I looked to the sky
Trying to find
Something to guide me
And when it got down to it
I saw right through it
And found it inside me.
Because looking for answers
From celestial dancers
Just fails to inspire
Because if I'm not livin'
For the gifts that I'm given
I might as well expire.
[Chorus (1)]
The sun'll be up soon
Can't you see it from the summit?
Now take my hand, walk with me,
And we'll plummet.
(You've got to fight your fear)
I can't wait for you no more
So you take this leap with me
(Or you just disappear... while I soar).
They're light years away
But I live for the day
And the night in which I exist
And if I should fall
Out of touch with it all
Then I'd be inclined to resist.
But until the day reckons
My destiny beckons
For me to push forth, head held high
So I'll lie in the shades
With my forces in spades
Until my time comes nigh.
[Chorus (2)]
The sun'll be up soon
Can't you see it from the summit?
Now take my hand, walk with me,
And we'll plummet.
(You've got to fight your fear)
You take my hand, steady,
And I see you're ready
(So let's make our way from here).
The world's not enough
So I'm calling your bluff
Play for keeps and the stakes start to rise
And at the end of the day
I'd see it no other way
Than through these, my own righteous eyes.
So fold if you must
But I know I can trust
My instinct as it's never been wrong
If my perceptions are scrambled
Then I shouldn't have gambled
And I won't have that claim for so long.
I haven't written the music or chorus for this yet. I'm thinking of putting it into a key but I still haven't learned my fifths yet, so I'm at a standstill there.
Brainstorm:
D7 > A > C > B
Am > C > F (1123) > G (3345)
Labels: Lyrics
posted by Dylan at 12:10 AM
3 Comments:
I like the end of the first verse, chorus isn't bad either.
Sometimes I feel you take the easy way out with rhymes, but they are lyrics, so it's what most people would wanna hear.
Plus, you make it a little more tolerable than most.
Funny, the only part of this I was really happy with was the "answer... dancer" scheme, but I feel bound by the need to rhyme, I know not all music does it but it's just a mental block I need to overcome.
Any tips for avoiding cliche rhyme schemes?
Just don't. Let your vocal track make the connection between lines.
Stress words differently. As long as the meter fits, and the flow of syllables, you can make it work.
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